Mock Cover, Take Three: THE BLACK GOD’S WAR

   Posted by: Moses Siregar III   in My Work

Changes in version 3.0:

1) The image blends together more, with part of her lip and chin continuing to the left, plus a subtle glimpse of her left eye. I flipped her image and make it 92% transparent. Huge thanks to David Kerschner for that idea!

2) Changed the title (still contemplating that).

3) Made room for a potential blurb (knock on wood).

The Black God's War

If I am able to get a good blurb, I think this could work. Another option would be to make the blurb’s font larger, and my name smaller. Do you think that’s a good idea, or no?

Any other thoughts?


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8 comments so far


Hey Moses,
Nice cover. I’d actually make the blurb smaller. It almost takes over, as if you are ashamed to be the author of the work and want to kid people into thinking the blurb author is the actual author.
I’d also fade the image into the background a little more. It looks very hard (especially the white on black of the right side) at the moment.
Nice work, though. Nice title as well. 🙂

July 15th, 2010 at 10:13 am

Great feedback, Ria. Thank you!

The previous title was DEUS EX KARMA: THE BLACK GOD’S WAR

I heard someone pronounce it “Deuce ex karma” the other day,” and it really made me rethink the title.

July 15th, 2010 at 10:16 am

in my humble reader/writer opinion, your name should be bigger than whatever blurb you can get! 😉 As a reader, I don’t like blurbs. As a writer, I’d love to see my name on the cover! 😀

July 16th, 2010 at 2:43 am

Thanks Barb!

July 16th, 2010 at 8:12 am

The image is warrior-sexy good. I would make the helmet part silver, rather than gold, to match the girl part. I would make the image smaller and the title and author name bigger. And I wouldn’t bother with the blurb. For some reason, most cover blurbs are off-putting.

If the cover girl is the hero, you might want the title related to her. Or is this a man book?

July 16th, 2010 at 10:26 am

Thanks Jack. Well, it’s a kind of epic fantasy that I hope will have strong appeal to both sexes. One issue I have with the title is that leans pretty heavily towards the masculine, and I want it to be a more balanced appeal. But at least the image obviously has the woman in it. The most central character is a woman, fwiw.

I may try it with a smaller image and larger text to see how I like it. Thanks again.

July 16th, 2010 at 10:42 am

I love that cover. I agree about making the blurb smaller (unless you get someone very well known in the Fantasy genre to blurb it, like Terry Brooks well known).

Also, and this might just be my issue… can you remove the III from your name and just be Moses Siregar?

But yeah, I’d definitely at least read the description and sample based solely on this cover.

July 18th, 2010 at 4:39 am

Great to hear, Izanobu!

I’ve pretty well committed to using the III. It sounds kind of pompous, but I’ve found that that’s better than having everyone you meet think that you made up your name as Moses Siregar LOL!

“Moses Siregar, is that your real name?”

“Yes …”

Thanks again.

July 18th, 2010 at 9:59 am

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